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The word document below is the paper that I need to be editied and the images have each page that I
need to be edited and the suggesions are marked on each page. Please let me know if you need further
instrucions. The paragraphs need to be shortened if they are longer than 4 sentences. Lastly, each paragrah
needs to start with a transition word or sentence refering to the last paragraph.
Formatting
Number your pages. No need for an elaborate headers or footers–the page number will do.
Run document through a spelling checker.
No special covers or folders. Use a simple cover sheet with title, your name, University name, course name and date
and staple the paper in upper left hand corner. No need for a table of contents.
Avoid right-hand justification. Jagged edges are easier to read.
Keep font size constant.
Indent paragraphs. Keep paragraphs short. Keep subheading structure simple.
Leave me enough margin room for comments–at least an inch on either side.
Avoid excessive capitalization, parentheses, bolding, and underlining. However, when creating subheadings, use one or possibly two of the above.
Be cautious when using appendices. If the paper cannot be understood without them, perhaps they belong in the text
itself.
Use proper citations, either the name of the author and page number in parentheses [e.g. (Miller, p. 14), (Goldstein, p. 663)] or using a footnote (either footnote style is fine). Avoid lengthy footnotes. If the note requires more than a sentence, it probably deserves to be in the text itself.
Use a single bibliography list. Sort by author’s last name (or agency name if no author identified). Underline book titles, journal names, and newspapers. Put quote marks around article titles. Include year published. Include volume numbers for journals. Include place and publisher for books. Include access date for websites.
Long quotations (ie, paragraphs) should be single-spaced and indented.
Writing
Avoid first person (“I” or “we”). Instead state your conclusions or analysis as an assertion or in the third person, such as “America’s urban transportation problems are…” or “This paper will examine…” or “One must conclude that…”
Avoid indefinite or weak words such as “it” or “there is”. Make your sentences have stronger verbs than “to be”.
For good paragraph structure, make the lead sentence the defining sentence or key sentence of the paragraph.
Subsequent paragraphs should build on that idea. In addition, include a transitional clause in either the first sentence or the last sentence of the previous paragraph when your topic changes. A transition can be a single word such as
“however” or “nevertheless” or “moreover”.
There are many ways to introduce a paper, but the first paragraph or two should define the topic. Every introduction should define what the paper is about and why the reader should

care about that topic. Towards the end of the introduction, you should have a sentence like: “The purpose of this paper is…” or “The paper will show…” Often, the introduction lays out the organization for the paper so that the reader knows what to expect.
Rhetorical questions can be powerful tools in an essay but should be used sparingly. Examples include: “Did the test scores improve after the busing plan?” and “And who was responsible for this program? Senator Brown and his cronies in the construction industry were.”
Abbreviations should be spelled out once and then put in parentheses, e.g., “Oregon’s Land Conservation and Development Commission (LCDC). Thereafter, you should use the abbreviation. Common usage abbreviations may be appropriate: IBM, CBS, USSR, etc.
If you take an idea from a source, be sure to identify the source immediately after the text. If you copy a source word-for-word, be sure to put the copied words in quotation marks and identify the source. To not do these things is to
plagiarize and can be grounds for a failing grade.
Regarding writing quality and grammar, there are a lot of potential improvements that you could make. Sentences should have transitional words that connect one sentence to the following sentence. Paragraphs should begin with topical sentences and should have transitional phrases that connect them, too. And you should avoid using the word “it” when a more specific noun is available.
On that note, I’ve attached a Style Sheet that I’ve used over the years as a guide to good, active writing.
In addition, pages 8-9 are repeated material from earlier in the paper, and don’t add to your argument.
Looking at the bigger picture, you could make any number of arguments about housing assistance in your paper. You could argue that Congress failed to fund its original goals in 1947, so that housing assistance only helps a portion of the eligible households. That’s a horizontal equity argument. Or you could argue in favor of more effective voucher programs over supply programs. That’s an efficiency argument. Or you could develop some other argument to say that we should stick with supply programs, despite the relative inefficiency. You might address questions of poverty concentration and poor quality of construction, both of which plagued public housing. Or you might contrast public housing and Section 8 with more recent efforts with the LIHTC program. Each program has different pros and cons.
Moreover, you might want to reflect on your personal experience from Illinois and Indiana. Chicago was famous for racial discrimination in housing assignment and poor quality in its public housing initiatives in the 1950’s and 1960’s. The public housing that I remember along the Dan Ryan Expressway in Chicago is now largely demolished. Was demolition a mistake or was the original housing design a mistake…?